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 Independent writing #17: Is it better to have a teacher?

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nguyenducphuong



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Bài gửiTiêu đề: Independent writing #17: Is it better to have a teacher?   Tue Sep 29, 2009 10:00 pm

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. Others think that it is always better to have a teacher. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons to develop your essay.

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Thesis: From my point of view, it is better to have a teacher.
(1) The teacher gives you useful instructions
- Which books should you read? Which points should you concentrate on?
- You don't waste your time to find documents.
- You learn more information and learn it more quickly.
(2) You get help from your teacher
- He has deep background knowledge in a particular field
- He answers your questions and corrects your mistakes
- He gives examples to help you understand difficult concepts
(3) He monitors your learning progress
- He gives you assignments
- He encourages you to learn

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. From my point of view, it is better to have a teacher. With the teacher's help, you can learn more information and learn it more quickly than you do it by yourself.

Firstly, your teacher could give you useful instructions. When you learn a new subject, you have to decide which books should be read, which points should be concentrated on. Without a teacher, you have to waste much of your time to solve those problems. By way of contrast, a teacher could help you get started more quickly and learn it systematically.

Secondly, you have your teacher's help if you face difficult problems. Your teacher often has wide background knowledge in a particular field. He could answer your questions and correct your mistakes. He also gives examples to clear difficult concepts and help you understand them more easily. Without a teacher, you have to solve yourself all the problems.

Furthermore, it is better to have a teacher because he monitors your progress. The teacher often gives you assignments and keeps track of your learning progress. He also encourages you to learn to achieve final success. Without a teacher, you may quit your job if you feel discourage when you can not overcome some difficult problems.

In conclusion, if you study by yourself, you don't have supports that are very necessary when you are learning. On the other hand, if you study with your teacher, you will have useful instructions and help from him to achieve your goal faster. Therefore, I believe that learning with a teacher is always better than learning by yourself.
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Bài gửiTiêu đề: Re: Independent writing #17: Is it better to have a teacher?   Wed Sep 30, 2009 1:13 pm

Hii, I have some comments for your essay. The essay is organized clearly, so it's easy to read. It is used many kind structures of sentence.
But your essay will be better if you don't use word like "you" in the essay. It makes reader feel uncomfortable. Some words like 'student' or 'pupil' is suitable

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. From my point of view, it is better to have a teacher. With the teacher's help, students can learn more information and more quickly than they do it by theirselves.

Firstly, the teacher could give the student useful instructions. When the student learns a new subject, he have to decide which books should be read, which points should be concentrated on. Without a teacher, he might waste much of time to solve those problems. By way of contrast, with the teacher's help, students could get started more quickly and learn according systematical way.

Secondly,with a teacher, the student will receive some help or suggestions if he faces a difficult problem. The teacher is a person who has wide knowledge in the particular major. Thus, he could help the student to deal his difficult issues or satify his curious. For example, the teacher could correct the student mistake,make the student mind clearly by giving them particular example. Obiviously, without a teacher, the student have to solve his problem by hisself. So, with these reasons, the student understand the lecture more easily with the teacher's help.


Thirdly, the teacher could help by monitoring the student's progress. The most important his task is ensuring that the student study better. For this purpose, he always give many assignments and keep track of his student's progress. When the student encounters a difficult problem, beside helping him, he also encourages the student to achieve final success. Naturally, if the student does not accomplish his assignments, the teacher will give some punishments. As a result, the student could not give up his work easily.

In sum up, many students believe that they might study by theirselves. Some of them are successful. But it a small number.For almost students, with the many advances of the teacher, it is better to learn under the teacher guide. He not only give students many useful instruction, but also keep their learning progress.
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nguyenducphuong



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Bài gửiTiêu đề: Re: Independent writing #17: Is it better to have a teacher?   Wed Sep 30, 2009 1:52 pm

Thanks for your comment. I highly appreciate your modifications. I also agree that I should use 'student' instead of 'you'. But there are some grammar errors in your reply.
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Hii, I have some comments for your essay. The essay is organized clearly, so it's easy to read. It is used (it uses) many kind structures of sentence.
But your essay will be better if you don't use word like "you" in the essay. It makes reader feel uncomfortable. Some words like 'student' or 'pupil' is(are) suitable

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher. From my point of view, it is better to have a teacher. With the teacher's help, students can learn more information and more quickly than they do it by theirselves(themselves).

Firstly, the teacher could give the student useful instructions. When the student learns a new subject, he have to decide which books should be read, which points should be concentrated on. Without a teacher, he might waste much of time to solve those problems. By way of contrast, with the teacher's help, students could get started more quickly and learn according systematical way(systematically).

Secondly,with a teacher, the student will receive some help or suggestions if he faces a difficult problem. The teacher is a person who has wide knowledge in the particular major. Thus, he could help the student to deal (with) his difficult issues or satify his curious. For example, the teacher could correct the student ('s) mistake(s),make the student mind clearly by giving them particular example (give examples to clear difficult concepts and help the student understand them more easily). Obiviously, without a teacher, the student have (has) to solve his problem by hisself (himself). (So, with these reasons, the student understand the lecture more easily with the teacher's help.)

Thirdly, the teacher could help by monitoring the student's progress. The most important his task (task of the teacher) is ensuring that his (the) student study better. For this purpose, he (always) give(s) many assignments and keep track of his student's progress. When the student encounters a difficult problem, beside helping him, he also encourages the student to achieve final success. Naturally, if the student does not accomplish his assignments, the teacher will give some punishments. As a result, the student could not give up his work easily.

In sum up, many students believe that they might study by theirselves (themselves). Some of them are successful. But it (is)a small number.For almost students, (with the many advances of the teacher), it is better to learn under the teacher ('s) guide. He not only give(s) students many useful instruction(s), but also keep(s) their learning progress.
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Bài gửiTiêu đề: Re: Independent writing #17: Is it better to have a teacher?   Wed Sep 30, 2009 10:33 pm

Some people think that they can learn better by themselves than with a teacher -->the assistant of their teacher). From my point of view, it is better to have a teacher (Can be changed --> From my point of view, it is better for students to achieve teacher’s support. With the teacher's help, you -> students can learn more information and learn it more quickly than you do it by yourself. -->achieve more information in a shorter time rather than do it themselves.

Firstly, your teacher could give you useful instructions. When you learn a new subject, you have to decide which books should be read, which points should be concentrated on. Without your teacher’s guidance , you have to waste much of your time to solve those problems. By way of contrast, a teacher could help you get started systematically--> teacher could help you choose essential materials, carry out the main point of the lessons more quickly and learn it systematically

Secondly, you have your teacher's help if you face difficult problems --> With the teacher’s support, students would be able to handle with/ face up with/ deal with difficult problems. Your teacher often has wide background knowledge in a particular = specific field. He could answer your questions and correct your mistakes. He also gives/delivers examples to clear difficult concept and help you understand them more easily -->to make difficult concepts clear and ….. Without the teacher’s help, you have to solve yourself all the problems – solve all the problems by yourself.

Furthermore, it is better to have a teacher because he monitors your progress --> teacher is not only students’ instructor but also the monitor who observes sts’s progress . The teacher often gives you assignments and keeps track of your learning progress. He also encourages you to learn to achieve final success. Without guidance of the teacher, you may quit your job if you feel discourage when you can not overcome some difficult problems. -->overcome challenges/ difficult problems

In conclusion, if you study by yourself, you don't have supports that are very necessary when you are learning --> you don’t have to hesitate if the points of knowledge are necessary/essential/crucial or not. On the other hand, if you study with your teacher, you will have useful instructions and help from him to achieve your goal faster. Therefore, I believe that learning with a teacher is always better than learning by yourself.
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